Paper Feedback

After having my paper read and reviewed, I was able to see what I needed to work on in order to improve my writing. One area that I will focus on is being sure to explain some of my topics that I discussed in my paper. I briefly explained several of the shows I watched and how they affected me but I didn't go into enough detail on some of my examples. I will be sure to go back after this and check each TV show that I mentioned to see which I can elaborate on in order to get the point across better. I will go about this by analyzing each show individually and how it affected me, instead of just kind of mentioning how it affected me but not going into enough detail. Making these changes will definitely make my paper much stronger and more interesting to the reader. It will also help me practice my writing and analyzing so that I will be an overall better writer.